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I Feel the Wind by ~saladin:iconsaladin:

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I see the wind
As it stirs the grass
Into gentle waves
As its fingers pass

Through sylph-like strands
Of this emerald sea
I sense the wind
It calls to me

I feel the wind
That stalks between
Ancient trees
Whose branches lean

And nod, bowing
To their lord
Born of air and
Souls that soared

To touch the sky
And be reborn
I yearn to join
But remain, forlorn

For to this earth
My soul is chained
Until the end
When hope is gained

I will rise above
This world of woes
And find the place
Where silence flows.
©2002-2009 ~saladin
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Submitted: June 4, 2002
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The other day, I was walking home, and I passed by a hill. The farmer who owns it has let the grass get really long, and the wind was making it wave. This poem kinda just sprung out of me.

Not too sure about the title, so if you can suggest anything better feel free :) (Smile)
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~eternityforgotten:iconeternityforgotten: Jun 4, 2002, 7:41:37 AM
wow - this is so beautiful.. with a wonderful flow to it

ahh really lovely :) (Smile)
especially the last stanas - very emotive!

well the name is good as it is... i might have called it 'ancient winds' but well thats just me.. lol
~justin-333:iconjustin-333: Jun 4, 2002, 7:42:39 AM
;) (Wink) i like it man! its very well writen and i love the rhyming! it sounds awsome!
i read this poem like 3 times b4 i made this comment cuz i liked it so much. it just kinda flows So well! Thumbs Up great work man! keep it up! :) (Smile)
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~eternityforgotten:iconeternityforgotten: Jun 4, 2002, 7:45:25 AM
damn i meant stanzas arggh!
~spaded-n-jaded:iconspaded-n-jaded: Jun 4, 2002, 8:51:57 AM
I likes, seems to flow just like the fluid wind....
9 outta 10 beers on the Beer before Liquor; will get you sicker scale rating!!
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Beer before Liquor; will get you sicker who is the one who has blood in there alcohol system officer, I just had a few cars, and now I just want to drive my beer... *hic* Beer before Liquor; will get you sicker
`dreamz13:icondreamz13: Jun 4, 2002, 9:06:10 AM
The words are as gentle as the evening breeze and reading this really gives me great pleasure and I wish I can teleport myself into that moment in time and immerse myself in the beauty of nature. Free of worries and responsibilities. Just like the wind.
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!fillerbunny:iconfillerbunny: Jun 4, 2002, 9:13:31 AM
theres some romanticism up in here
nice poem
beauteous
~emtilt:iconemtilt: Jun 4, 2002, 10:24:02 AM
This is beautiful. The short lines flow wonderfully...so smooth. Has a great mood to it.
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~alineko:iconalineko: Jun 4, 2002, 10:26:17 AM
Awesome poem really... you've really got a feel for what you write. :butterflytwo: (Butterfly)
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~flex:iconflex: Jun 4, 2002, 10:57:14 AM
Great flow! I like the rhyming - it makes it so smooth....:D (Big Grin)
I could really feel the soft green gras waving in the wind...i know a place just like the one you discripe...:) (Smile)
Great poem!
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