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Settling softly
A graceful fall
Pirouetting in crystal air
A dance of elegance
Lost in the multitude
Ended by the earth's firm kiss.

The snowflake sinks
Into a bed of brethren
Becomes one with all
Singularity surrendered
To join the Drift
In blissful anonymity.

Motionless
That which was
Lies silent
Smothered and smothering
Awaiting thaw
And Spring's release.

One wonders
Does it now regret
The fall from grace
Abandoning its dance
Or does it slumber, fury faded
Knowing peace at last?
The snow's been falling here in Scotland, and it's bloody freezing! It looks nice, but it's not much use for anything else.

Except for inspiration, that is. I was watching a blizzard through a lecture threatre window when this idea came to me - what if a snowflake was sentient? Would it embrace its inevitable demise on the hard ground or would it regret the loss of its freedom?

This piece came from that thought. I'd appreciate you comments and criticism. Enjoy :)
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Snowfall Dances by ~saladin Pretend you are a flake. Okay, pretend you are a snowflake and you are falling toward the earth. The poet asks, "Would it embrace its inevitable demise on the hard ground or...? You might be tempted to answer this inspiring question, so read "Snowfall Dances". You'll find it full of fascinating lines like, "Pirouetting in crystal air..." which may just tempt you to love the listening. ( Featured by jsenn )
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RumbleFish2112 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
Did you choke on those big words you used like you choked on that $@^%
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liveialone Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2005   Writer
pretty....
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mysensezFailme Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2004
awesome poem...i have written a similar shot-story for english class once...
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naniloa86 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2004  Student Digital Artist
awesome poem... where i live, snow plays a big role in winter.
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saladin Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2004
We don't really get so much of it in Ireland...

...but in Glasgow it'd freeze the bollocks off you :(
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Lieth Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2004   Writer
Congratulations on writing a great poem. The short lines and eloquent use of words came together well. Your imagery was vivid and animated, as in the lines “Pirouetting in crystal air” and “The snowflake sinks/ Into a bed of brethren”. The poem was also sensuous as in “kiss” and “smothering”. The poem also had a peaceful, tranquil tone created by the words “softly” “bed” “motionless” “silent” “peace” and perhaps reinforced by the short lines, which somehow seemed as though they were meant to be quietly and slowly. You were also able to reach an effective conclusion by becoming more abstract and distanced but still maintaining unity.
Once again, well done.
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Lieth Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2004   Writer
Congratulations on writing a great poem. The short lines and eloquent use of words came together well. Your imagery was vivid and animated, as in the lines “Pirouetting in crystal air” and “The snowflake sinks/ Into a bed of brethren”. The poem was also sensuous as in “kiss” and “smothering”. The poem also had a peaceful, tranquil tone created by the words “softly” “bed” “motionless” “silent” “peace” and perhaps reinforced by the short lines, which somehow seemed as though they were meant to be quietly and slowly. You were also able to reach an effective conclusion by becoming more abstract and distanced but still maintaining unity.
Once again, well done.
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saladin Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2004
Thank you for the indepth comment.

Intelligent feedback is something rare on this site. :salute:
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ContraFool Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2004
Oh wow, this is very good. I never really thought of snow as a concious thing before, but now that I think about it, it makes sense. It does seem to move like it has a mind of it's own and you have captured it beautifully in your poem and posed an interesting question to which I'm afraid humanity cannot know the answer. Great job!! --Erik
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daeira Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2004
I..

Just lovely I would say. So simplistic and beautiful. The thoughts of a snowflake - now that's original. And that last stanza is so great.

Great work.
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